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Band 1

Nowadays in many countries, women have full-time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
There is no doubt that these days many women have
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full time
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full-time
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job
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i
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 am going to discuss
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both
statement
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 and write mine.
Body paragraph 1
recently many
womens
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women
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like
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have liked
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 to work and get
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 own
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money
. and maybe it is because
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 quality of
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, they usually aim to
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better quality of
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also
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somtimes
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sometimes
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single moms so
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they
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 have children
cary
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care
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 them.
because
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 of that they need to work full time.
Body paragraph 2
and if
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both parents were
workindg
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working
.
the
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 have to
hilp
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help
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on
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 household tasks. because
the
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work
life
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 going to be
haerd
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hard
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 with
in
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the
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one parent
deel
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deal
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alon
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alone
,
it
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 must be some
balenc
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balance
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Conclusion
in my
opinion
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opinion,
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tow
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two
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 of the parents
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should
could
sould
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should help
hilp
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help
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the
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life
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 going to be so
mush
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much
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heard
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hard
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to
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for
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 the family

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Structure your essay clearly, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
You have addressed the main issue of gender equality in household tasks due to full-time jobs.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have expressed your opinion in a clear manner and provided reasons for it.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Work-life balance
  • Harmonious relationship
  • Mental health
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Set a good example
  • Cooperate
  • Respectful partnership
  • Overburdened
  • Involvement
  • Household duties
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