Many government thinks that economic progress is their most important goals, some people however thinks that other progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
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most
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the most
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essential
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others
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is
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important
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financial
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stability
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important
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development
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developments
also
necessary for getting good revanue
.
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apply
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to say
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a nataion
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have
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has
money
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its
budget
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the budget
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need, they can build a roadway and others
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other
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infrastructure
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opportunities
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their
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citizens
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can not spend money
on making road
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roads
hospital
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hospitals
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don't
money
to build nations
, as
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and as
result
they are not able to provide good living conditions.
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result,
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think that Change the capitalization
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staff
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apply
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generate
the
income which Correct article usage
apply
are
more Change the verb form
is
cruisual
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crucial
of
development and they can Change preposition
for
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call
sell
naturual resoure
to get the Correct your spelling
natural resources
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revenue
grwoing
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growing
ecconomic
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economic
For instance
, government
of Indian Add an article
the government
interduce
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introduced
make
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polices
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policies
invite
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invited
nations
to invest in India it helps to continue the contery
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country
contrary
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earn
money
.
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apply
government
to Change to a plural noun
governments
stable
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stabilise
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apply
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economic
and
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because
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the governement
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government
others project
and high inflanece create more Fix the agreement mistake
other projects
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problems
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