Many government thinks that economic progress is their most important goals, some people however thinks that other progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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economical
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growth is
most
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the most
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essincial
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essential
aims
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,
while
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other
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others
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think that all progress
are
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also
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impotant
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important
for
a
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a nation
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nations
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. I firmly believe that
finacial
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financial
stateabulity
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stability
is more
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important
for every
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nations
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but other
development
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developments
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also
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necessary for getting good
revanue
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revenue
. First and
formost
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foremost
, I
aruged
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argued
argue
that economic
statusbuilty
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status
is important because
a
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strong
nations
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need
money
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say
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if
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a nataion
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nataion
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nation
notation
have
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has
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enough amount of
money
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on
his
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its
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tresure they can spend
budget
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the budget
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according to
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need, they can build a roadway and
others
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eminities like
infrastruture
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infrastructure
and generate job
opportiunity
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opportunities
for
thier
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their
citizen
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citizens
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so that they can earn texes.
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, many undeveloped
nations
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can not spend
money
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on making
road
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roads
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or
hospital
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hospitals
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because they
dont
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don't
have
money
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to build
nations
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,
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as
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a
result
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they are not able to provide good living conditions.
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,
i
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think that
stute
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staff
have power and they have to establish
the
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apply
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certain aims and
genrate
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generate
the
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income which
are
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is
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more
cruisual
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crucial
of
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development and they can
sall
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call
sell
the
naturual resoure
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natural resources
to get the
revanue
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revenue
and that would be helpful to be stable in the
grwoing
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growing
ecconomic
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economic
.
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,
government
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of Indian
interduce
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introduced
the
make
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in India
polices
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policies
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and
invite
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the developed
nations
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to invest in India it helps to continue the
contery
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country
contrary
progress and people can get job opprunity and
eran
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earn
money
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.
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,
although
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it is
a
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crucial for many
government
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governments
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to
stable
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stabilise
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the
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ecconmic
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economic
progress,
and
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others
are disagree
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.
i
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I
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believe that both are
equaly
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equally
important
becasue
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because
without
money
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the governement
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governement
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government
cannot spend it on
others project
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other projects
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and high inflanece create more
problem
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problems
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in
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nations
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nations'
nation's
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development.
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