The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2008.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2008.
The bar chart compares the expenditure of a weekly family budget on 8 various stuffs between 1968 and 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most of their income was spent on food and free time activities
while
the least was on fuel and power by families in both years. As the chart shows, a huge percentage of the capital was spent on dishes at around 17% in 2008 and
this
point was as twice high as 35% in 1968.
Moreover
,the percentage for household goods was approximately similar at 8% each year.Turning to the figure for housing which was 19% in 2018
while
it was 10% in 1968.
However
,the point for fuel and power was exactly the same 4% and 7%,respectively. In 1968 families mostly spent their income on clothing at 10% compared to 5% in 1968.Obviously,more than 20% of income was spent on free time activities in 2008
while
it revealed only 9% in 1968.The expenditure on transportation was doubled with 19% in 2008 compared to 8% in 1968.The figure for personal goods was 8% in 1968 and 4% in 2008.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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