Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic study. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education plays a crucial role
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successful in the aeon. In recent years, people
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more
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towards white-collar jobs rather than skilled jobs
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is the reason there are
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skilled persons as compared to professionals.
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my perspective, I
am disagree
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with the statement that vocational training
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more
weitage
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weight
than academic study. If many humans go to
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vocational training programs
then
there will be a shortage of qualified workers.
Moreover
, universities
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vital
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role
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a
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student excellent in
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their studies
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as well as
they imbibe confidence among them to beat cut-throat competition which
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them to
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achieve
their desired goals.
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university
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, most of the higher education students spend 4-5 hours extra in a university in the hope of
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future.
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task response
You should develop your argument more fully to provide a complete response. Consider discussing both sides of the argument before stating your opinion and supporting it with specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Your essay's logical structure is generally clear, but make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that transitions between ideas are smooth. Starting each main point in a new paragraph can help.
coherence cohesion
Try to conclude your essay with a summary of your main points and restate your opinion, offering a final thought on the topic.
task response
The introduction tries to address the topic and gives a clear line of argument, showing understanding of the issue at hand.
coherence cohesion
You use a variety of vocabulary which strengthens your essay and shows your range of language skills.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic study
  • vocational training
  • qualified tradespeople
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • prestigious
  • availability
  • skilled tradespeople
  • economic benefits
  • entry into the workforce
  • educational costs
  • societal needs
  • functioning of everyday life
  • shortage
  • professions
  • potential for high earnings
  • career stability
  • overlooked
  • university degrees
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