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The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones. The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.

The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones. The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main characteristics, and compare with the corresponding ones.
The cycle diagram illustrates how glass is recycled.
Overall
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, the 5-step cycle
treated
Add a missing verb
was treated
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, washed, crushed
and
Correct word choice
apply
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melted, and moulded.
First,
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the rubbish in the recycle bin was transported to the treatment plant; after the transportation
in
Change preposition
to
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 the treatment plant, these items were washed and sterilised.
Second,
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they
crushed
Add a missing verb
are crushed
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 and melted by crushing and melting machines before moulding with moulding chines.
Last
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, they delivered to the supermarket, and the cycle continued.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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