The flow chart below shows the three stages of glass bottle recycling

The flow chart below shows the three stages of glass bottle recycling
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The flow chart below shows the three stages of glass bottle recycling
The diagram illustrates the
overall
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steps of recycling
glass
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bottles
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.
Overall
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, There are three
stages
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, showing the process of
glass
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bottle recycling, beginning with gathering the wasted
glass
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bottles
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from many areas,
ending
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and ending
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with delivering these
bottles
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to supermarkets. In the first
stages
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,
the
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a
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large number of used
glass
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bottles
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is collected to a main point,
after
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and after
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that
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that,
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It is transported by van to recycle. Next steps, these
bottles
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are placed in
high - pressure
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high-pressure
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water in three different
stages
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, including clear, green and brown. And these are added to
glass
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factories to treat.
The
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next stage two, in the
glass
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factory, these
bottles
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are treated to small pieces of
glass
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. After, It is heated in a furnace with a temperature from 600c-800c. From that, It includes two parts of
glass
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such
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as recycled liquid and new liquid which is shaped
to
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into
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a
glass
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mold
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mould
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.
Finally
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, in
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stages
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stage
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three,
bottles
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are shaped comprehensively
,
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apply
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and are delivered to grocery or
supermarket
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supermarkets
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to
ready
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be ready
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for sale to customers.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles, stages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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