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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The
sales
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 of fairtrade*-labelled coffee in 1999 is considerably lower in
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comparison
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 to 2004. The
UK
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 has lower stats compared to
Switzerland
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 and it is shown that
Swiss
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 has 2 times the scale than The
UK
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, compared to the latest year it has shown that The
UK
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 is gradually ahead of
Switzerland
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 with
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 ratio of 20:6 which is more than double. In general,
Switzerland
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 has the highest stats in
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1999 and in the 2004 United Kingdom leads the pack with an astonishing
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 of 20 million
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Euros.
The bananas
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Bananas
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sales
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is
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 considerably higher than coffee, with Swiss leading again in
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1999 and moving on to
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2004,
Switzerland
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 is still leading in
sales
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, when
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 the stats of
Switzerland
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 in 1999 to 2004 has increased by more than 3 times. The bananas
sales
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is
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 quite low for
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, but the progress it has made
for
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over
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 the past 5 years is quite amazing, in 2004
the
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sales
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has
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 more than 5 times the size
than
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in
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 the
last
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 5 years. We can't even compare the
sales
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 between
Switzerland
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 and The
UK
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 for
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 matter, in 1999
Switzerland
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 was ahead of The
UK
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 by a large margin and it is still the same way in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, uk, switzerland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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