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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every human on
this
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need
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 to
work
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 to survive.
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, many people whole of their
life do
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whole lives
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work
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 which they do not enjoy or don't have
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expertise
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in.
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 In
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 essay we will discuss the reason why
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 happens and
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 the outcome of it. Every human is created with
different
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 mindset so they have different liking and choices of
work
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. Some like to teach,
other
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others
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 like to be
doctor
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doctors
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 and so everyone loves to
work
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 in various professions.
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 it is estimated that more than 80 Percent of people are doing that
work
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which
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they don't like or
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work
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 in which they do not have expertise. The first and foremost reason could be the circumstances which forced him to do
work
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 which does not wish to do. To illustrate, Recently, I met a child who was working in my neighbour's house. I talked to him and he told me he wanted to be a doctor but he is working here in labour as his father expired
last
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 year and he has to feed his family.
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, lack of opportunities is another reason. There are lakhs of students preparing for competitive
exam
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exams
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 like IAS we have
limited
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a limited
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 number
for
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 seats. So,
remaining
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the remaining
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student
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students
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 will have to
work
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 in
profession
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a profession
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 they don't prefer working. Every action has some sort of consequences.
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, working at your unwanted place
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have
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.
Lack
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 of enthusiasm can be one for them.
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, you will not be happy at
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workplace
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a workplace
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. It will always give
u
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you
sort
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a sort
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 of dissatisfaction and
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 you will not
able
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be able
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 to give 100% in that profile.
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, As soon as completed my graduation, I got a job
of
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in
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Testing
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a Testing
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 profile.
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, I always wanted to
work
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 as a penetration tester. So, I worked there for more than 2 years and that time period was very hectic for me as I was not enjoying doing
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.
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, When I switched my job as a penetration tester, I
start
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 enjoying my
work
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 and I was rewarded the best employee within 6 months in that company.
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 shows that when do
work
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 of your expertise and liking, you put
all
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in all
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 your hard
work
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 and you enjoy working
that
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on that
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.
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, It is very vital to do that
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 which you are passionate about
otherwise
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, it will be very stressful.
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, you will not be able to enjoy that
work
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 and everything you will
pressure
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be pressured
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 for the
work
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 assigned to you.

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task achievement
Your introduction sets the context well but needs a stronger thesis statement that explicitly outlines the essay's scope. Make sure to clearly state what will be discussed in the body paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
A more organized structure will improve readability. Consider following a consistent pattern, such as 'reason and example' followed by 'consequence and example', for each body paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Work on your transitions between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments smoothly.
task achievement
You have included relevant and specific examples, which add depth and authenticity to your arguments.
task achievement
Your essay covers both the reasons why people end up in jobs they don't like and the consequences, showing a balanced response to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The supporting main points in your paragraphs are strong. You provide logical explanations and real-life examples to support your ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career guidance
  • financial pressures
  • societal expectations
  • familial pressures
  • personal passion
  • job opportunities
  • unfulfilling work
  • fear of change
  • stable employment
  • career satisfaction
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