Some people believe that climate has the greatest effect on people's way of life. Other believe that the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Yes, I do agree on the
both
satatment given by the question some
people
believe that
climate
has the
effect
on
people
way
of life and other believe that the ecomony of the
region
had the greatestes
effect
. In
this
eassy is am going to talk about
both
and give my opinion. Yes, the
climate
does the
effect
the
people
way
to live and take time to adapte the
climate
in the sorrunding.
For example
: In Nepal there are three geography himalaya
mountain
and
terai
region
. In
this
three
region
the
people
have the different
way
of living and
way
to survive.
For example
: In himalays the
climate
will be the in negative deagree and the pepole will wear warm cloth and go wake up late at aroug 8 or 9 o clock. In
mountain
region
tha the
climate
moderate either more cold or hot they will have regular life style. In
terai
region
it is too hot in so the
people
have different
way
to live like they wear half shirt or vest to prevent from hot etc.
This
stament i given is from my country geography structure. I
also
agree on the economy of the
region
has the greatest
effect
. In my pov ( Point of view) that in Nepal it has more
effect
in econmoy. In nepal there three types of
region
himalya
mountain
and
terai
region
.
For example
: In himalya
region
the
people
can earn by only doing farming and exporting the good to other country or the provison. In
mountain
region
there more ways to earn and have many side hustles to make money from the
both
region
this
region
have the high economy that have more money. In
terai
region
people
can only earn through farm and doing the labour work in factory. In
terai
region
theri are many factory so and have many land so they can use to grow crops and sell it. At
last
that I sould agree sttongly with the
both
statment that
climate
effect
the life of
people
and economy have the greatest
effect
. So, in the eassy I have given my opinion. The
both
statements have
both
pros and corns.
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Your essay provides a clear response to the question and both viewpoints have been addressed.
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You have attempted to provide relevant examples to support your points, which is good.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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