As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?
Nowadays, a lot of
people
travel
around the world, try
to see more and more new places, Wrong verb form
trying
Correct word choice
and broadens
broadens
their horizons. Correct subject-verb agreement
broaden
People
choose to travel
by
different Change preposition
in
way
: to Fix the agreement mistake
ways
travel
on foot, by bikes, cars, water, air
transport
and other vehicles. The most popular vehicle is the plane. This
essay will look into problems
which affect flights
on the environment and what measures could be taken to solve the problems
.
Firstly
, flights
cause bigger carbon
emissions. People
choose to travel
short distances with planes which they can choose to overcome with another vehicle which emits less carbon
dioxide. But people
want to go to the exact place in the fastest way
. For example
, Lithuanian people
and not only Lithuanian people
really love to travel
around Europe and usually choose air
transport
. But they could choose another way
, for example
, to go with
Change preposition
by
trains
. Fix the agreement mistake
train
Secondly
, air
transport
causes climate change. Big
amount of Correct article usage
A big
flights
left a really big footprint on our Earth and caused a bigger greenhouse effect. Although
, air
transport
cause
just 2,5% of all Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
carbon
emissions, but
if we Correct word choice
apply
will be
more responsible it can help to solve greenhouse effect Wrong verb form
are
problems
.
However
, people
always could take the right measures to solve problems
caused by the flight. Firstly
, people
can choose another transport
for a short distance. For example
, they could choose alternative vehicles. People
can travel
by train. It is cheaper and through the window opens up a beautiful landscape. Secondly
, people
can travel
around their native country and get to know their country's cultures and places which they do not know. People
can do it on their foot or intercity transport
.
In conclusion, flights
cause a lot of problems
. Air
transport
emits a big
amount of Correct word choice
large
carbon
dioxide and causes climate change. But people
always can choose the right way
to solve that
Change the determiner
that problem
those problems
problems
. They can choose alternative vehicles, travel
around their native country on foot and save time and money.Submitted by oimigle on
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general
Your essay addresses the task effectively, but there are some inconsistencies in sentence structure and grammar. Work on refining these aspects to improve clarity and coherence.
example-use
Use more concrete examples to support your arguments. For instance, instead of broadly mentioning 'Lithuanian people,' provide statistical data or a more specific scenario to strengthen your point.
cohesion
Connect your paragraphs better with clear linking words or phrases. This will help in maintaining a smoother flow throughout your essay.
conclusion
While your conclusion is present and summarizes your main points, make sure it also restates your stance clearly and suggests potential future actions or perspectives.
task response
Your essay clearly identifies and discusses the major problems related to increased flights and their impact on the environment.
structure
You have provided a good introduction and conclusion, helping to frame your essay effectively.
content
You offer feasible solutions, such as using alternative modes of transport for short distances, which shows practical thinking.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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