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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart shows a comparison of the top ten
countries
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 for electricity generation and usage in 2014.
Overall
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, China had the highest levels of electricity
production
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 and
consumption
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 compared to other
countries
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 in 2014. In general.China had a higher level of
production
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 than
consumption
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, with figures of 5,398 and 5,322
kWh
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, respectively.
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, the
united states
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United States
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 was only lower about 1,000
kWh
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 from
china
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China
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. Focusing on the remaining
countries
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, Germany had a higher
consumption
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 than
production
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, at 582.5 and 526.6
kWh
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, respectively.
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 ,the lowest number of
production
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 and
consumption
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countries
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 Canada,France ,Brazil,and Korea,Rep were a similar number levels , around 540 and 450.Looking for the rest two
contries
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countries
,Russia had the same number of
the
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both data ,roughly 1,000
biliion
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billion
kWh
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 , and
then
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 Japan,it was 936.2 of
production
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 than 856.7 of
consumption
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 placed fourthly position on the form.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, production, consumption, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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