The graphs below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opend in the one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opend in the one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the
number
of closed
shops
and new
shops
in certain
country
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countries
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from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that many
shops
were opened at the beginning and its opening rate decreased substantially over the period.
While
, closing rate is slightly decline, making its
number
higher compared to new
shops
at the
end
. In 2011, The
number
of shop closures was relatively low
accounted
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for 6,200 and increased gradually reaching its peak at above 7,000 in 2013 before
dropped
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drastically to roughly 500 by 2015, followed by a significant rise to approximately 5,000. Its figure remained consistent at the same
number
till the
end
. In comparison, by 2011, a large
number
of owners opened their shop, accounting for 8,500 but the
number
of opening
shops
showed a considerable decrease in the next year to 4,000, which
is still
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remained constant till 2017, with a minimal fluctuation to 6,000 in 2014, after that it dropped to 3,000 in the
end
. In conclusion, both the
number
of
opening
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opened
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and closed
shops
were
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decline
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declined
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, but in the
end
, people
were tend
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tended
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to
closed
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close
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their
shop
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shops
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more than
opened
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open
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it
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them
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, end with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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