The two charts below show the proportion of qualified graduates in a particular country. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.

The two charts below show the proportion of qualified graduates in a particular country. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.
The diagrams illustrate the percentage of graduates in six different categories in a particular country between 1980 and 2008.
Overall
, all of the graduated fields mentioned had figures that fluctuated over nearly three decades except
first
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first-degree
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degree
science
and master sciences aspects.
While
graduates’
masters
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master's
masters'
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art,
PhD
arts
and
PhD
science
fields gradually rose over the years, the
number
of graduates who completed
first
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first-degree
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degree
arts
plummeted in
this
time frame. In 1998, around 12% of students graduated with
the
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a
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masters
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master's
masters'
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art
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of art
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degree
and
this
number
increased slightly by 1% after 28 years. With
the
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a
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similar upward trend, the
number
of students who graduated
PhD
arts
and
PhD
science
fields soared by 5% and 17% respectively.
According to
other aspects mentioned, around 14% decreased among graduates who finished
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their first
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first
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first-degree
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degree
arts
study,
this
number
declined from 25% to 11% over three decades. Meanwhile, the percentage of
first
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first-degree
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degree
science
and master
science
graduation
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graduates
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had a stable tendency in turn 19% and 29% in the time frame of
two
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the two
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periods mentioned.
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