The maps below sho the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

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The maps illustrate the

centre

of a small

town

known as Islip, the maps indicate how it is now and plans for its enhancement.

Overall

, it can be seen that there will be several clear changes

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the

town

, some venues will be replaced, added,

removed

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or removed

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According to

what is depicted, there are two shops area viewed on the main road, it is planned to remove one of them.

In addition

, the park will be smaller

due to

the new places like new housing.

However

, the

centre

of the

town

will be surrounded by

dual

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carriageway. Obviously, the school

located

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is located

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in the same location, but it will be on the carriageway

nearby

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near

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the housing. In the

north east

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northeast

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part of the

centre

, there will be another new housing area.

Moreover

, people who want to go to the shopping

centre

could park their cars in the new car park zone.

While

there was a countryside area, it will be demolished in the new map as a development.

Therefore

, these improvements

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the

town

centre

lead

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led

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to the progress of the city.

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task response

Your response addresses the task well, but it could benefit from more specific examples and details to fully support your points. For instance, identifying some specific venues that will be replaced or added would provide clearer context.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion could be more distinct. Consider adding a conclusion to summarize the changes and their potential impact on the town.

overall

There are some minor grammatical and lexical inaccuracies, such as 'the maps indicate how it is now and plans for its enhancement' which should be 'the maps indicate its current state and future development plans'. Focus on refining these to improve clarity and correctness.

task response

You have clearly identified several key changes that are planned for the town center and have described them in a logical sequence.

coherence cohesion

Your description of the maps is clear and easy to understand, and you have used appropriate vocabulary for discussing changes and developments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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The maps below sho the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged at 15 or younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contract between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.