It is generally believed that some people are born with certains talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
A public
opinion among individuals Correct article usage
Public
say
that some are born with a specific Correct subject-verb agreement
says
talent
towards somethingAdd the comma(s)
, for example,
for example
a person born with great skill in football or some good at chees more than others, however
it is not necessary to be born with Add a comma
however,
talent
because there is a claimed says the chilled can be good in anything when we taught them, although
the first opinion is correct but
I believe that second opinion Remove the conjunction
apply
also
true because there is a certain way of learning which lead to the succss
in Correct your spelling
success
any thing
.
Correct your spelling
anything
Firstly
, it is true that many people are born with talent
in some area, and they become really good quickly and they provide a significantly high level of performance , for
instance
the great musician Add the comma(s)
instance,
Mazart
when I heard the story of his success I noticed that he did it in a really short time and that shows the impact of Correct your spelling
Mozart
talent
.
In fact, this
is not the only path to being good at something, if someone decides to learn a skill and with a sincere desire he will eventually become even better compared to someone who has the talent
, for example
, a lot of scientists were not geniuses although
they presented great things for science and humans، and there is a study Harvard did shows that 80 per cent of successful people reach to their success by the hard work.
In conclusion, although
it is true that talent
is important for quick achievement but does not mean that it will be the only way.Submitted by ahmedaziz9811 on
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the task by discussing both views and giving your opinion. However, ensure that your position is clearly stated in the introduction and conclusion. This helps in fully satisfying the 'Task Achievement' criterion.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is organized and paragraphs are present, try to ensure a logical flow between ideas. Use linking words and transition phrases to create a clearer progression of thoughts, such as 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' or 'Therefore.'
task achievement
Your main points are present but general. To improve, support your claims with more detailed examples and explanations. For instance, explain more about Mozar's (Mozart's) achievements or provide additional real-life examples of talent vs. hard work.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea. This helps in improving coherence and making your essay easier to follow.
task achievement
You have used a relevant example (Mozart) to support one of your points.
task achievement
Your essay presents both sides of the argument and expresses your own opinion, which is essential for this task.
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