The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the average ratio of school students learning to play four various
music
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instruments namely piano , guitar , drums and
violin
in the
year
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years
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2005 , 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, the most significant feature is that the maximum number was recorded for children who learned to play piano and guitar in the
year
2015
however
at the same time the minimum percentage was for
violin
learners. In the
year
2005 , the popularity of
learnring
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learning
to play music with instruments was very weak most of the proportion
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around 10 % and
blelow
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low
while
the
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following next 5 years the
piano
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number of piano
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and
guitars
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guitar
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total learners increased remarkably by
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double
in contrast
the figures
of
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kids who learned
violin
and drums remained the same.
On the other hand
, In the
year
2015 ,
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the average
percentage of pion and guitar players recorded at their highest
number
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numbers
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approximately
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at approximately
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39% and 40% respectively
whereas
violin
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the lowest favourite instrument to be learned by children at 5%
in addition
drums
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not a lovable music tools for students and percentages were about 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words violin, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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