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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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The column graph gives clear data about the distances travelled by one individual in a week (in kilometres) by using a
bicycle
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, motorbike, aeroplane,
bus
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, and rail in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, British citizens prefer to travel by
bus
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 more than
bicycle
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.
Besides
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 that, the train comes as a second option for them. First of all,
according to
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 the year 1990, people obtained
bus
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 as the best type of transportation with 40
Km
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 followed by 38
Km
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 by the railway.
Whereas
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 the lowest distances travelled per person per week was plane with no more than 1KM.
Then
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 followed by 3% and 4
KM
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 of using
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 ( respectively).
Secondly
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, in 2000, the residents of the UK still loved the
bus
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 as a great vehicle to travel with approximately 42KM
while
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 the lowest choice was the
bicycle
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 with just one per person in 7 days.
In addition
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, the next category was motorbikes and
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 with about 2KM and
KM
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 respectively.
Nevertheless
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, the train station became a second favourite section of vans. In conclusion, the areas travelled per person in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK witnessed
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overall
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an overall
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 110
KM
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 in 2000
while
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100KM
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100
 in 1990.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bicycle, bus, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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