The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table chart demonstrates data about enrollments in 1928,1958 and 2008, at Bristol University.
Overall
, the
amount
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number
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of
students
soared several
time
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times
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in comparison with old times as
a
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the
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percentage of foreigners
that
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apply
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links with
total
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a total
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of people
which
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who
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enroll
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enrol
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from the
near
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nearby
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territories . In terms of precipitation, in 1928 the sum of the
students
was 218 but it marginally surged to 1046 in 1958. After
the
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1958 it still
was growing
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and multiplied 6 times in 2008. Notably,
Female
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population
also
was getting high with
little
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a little
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gap in 1958 when it
totaled
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32% , at the same time male amounts hit
the
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a
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peak, but it did not stop skyrocketing of women percentage . In 2008 it totaled more than
a
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half of
students
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the students
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.
While
, in percentage of
oversea
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overseas
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people was
uplifting
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uplifted
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from 5% in 1928 to almost one-third of the whole
universitu's
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university
university's
students
in 2008 , with foreigners from 98 states in comparison with 3 countries in 1928. On
the
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top of that, indicators of people near Bristol abundantly fell to 1-2% in 2008 from half in 1928.
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