The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the proportion of citizens who went to the
cinema
more than once
in
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a month in a specific country between the
years
1978 and 2008.
Overall
, the percentage of visiting the
cinema
for the young generation, who were 14 to 34
years
old, remained almost at the same level,
while
, for the older generation who were 35
years
old and over, it increased slightly in 40
years
. The proportion of people going to the
cinema
at least once per month had the same pattern, which had a resurgence in the 1990s after declining
at the end
of the
1980
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for both older groups. 50 plus
years
old citizens visited the
cinema
with just over 40% in 1978, and
this
ratio reached over 50% after 1998. In the same year, 1998, the percentage of individuals between 35 and 49
years
old, who went to the movies, reached its top point, which was 70%.
Then
, it slightly dropped around 55% in 2008. The ratio of
movie lover
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citizens, who were between the range of 25-34
years
old, had a massive jump to 80% in 1998 after decreasing dramatically to 60% in 1988. The youngest generation, who went to the
cinema
, had small changes around 90% through the
years
.
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