The plans show the layout of the university’s sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two maps illustrate the university’s

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before and after the reconstruction.

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, as is obvious, there will be some transformations like adding a leisure pool, and

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hall and

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devoting more changing rooms and in the meantime, equipping Cafe, Dance studio, and

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shop. Presently, on both wings of the university’s

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, 2 outdoor courts are located.

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, the gym club is on the North

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, and the changing room and Seating are on the West and East

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of the pool. In front of the corridor, there is a reception. For the prospective plan, it has been objected that the university will add a cafe shop and

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store at the entrance of the

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. A wide relaxation pool, which is going to be beside the changing room, will be on the West

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, and in front of it, 2 extra outfit changing spaces will be built, where one of them will be on the right hand of the Roastery.

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, two Dance studios will be constructed beside the

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hall, going to be built

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of an outdoor court, on the East

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of the

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introduction conclusion

Include a more distinct conclusion to summarize the main points of transformation. This will give a sense of completion to your essay.

clear comprehensive ideas

Clarify some sentences for better understanding. For example, 'In the prospective plan, it has been objected' should be rewritten for clarity.

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Make sure that all relevant features are covered. Mention the demolition of the outdoor courts and the exact location of the new facilities.

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Good attempt at comparing the current and future layouts of the sports center.

logical structure

Logical progression of ideas, separating present and future layouts effectively.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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The plans show the layout of the university’s sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Fully explain your ideas

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Being only child is better than having siblings. Do you agree or disagree?

"According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average 'holiday' is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?"

In many countries the proportion of older people is increasing. Could this have more positive or negative effects on society?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others,however,say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.