Some believed in many countries, the investment of public in arts can be justified. Others thinks that government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Everyone

accept

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that where is going the

investment

of

government

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the government

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must

be knew

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by society. Efficient

of

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investment

in many countries is a controversial issue today. The

investment

of

public

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the public

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in

arts

can be justified. On the one

hand

, many

people

believe that it has some positive effects,

on the other

hand

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many others think there are a few negative effects

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along with

. In the first place, the most important positive

effects

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effect

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of

investment

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the investment

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of

public

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the public

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in

arts

is

contibuting

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contributing

to

people

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up to encourage creative

tendecy

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tendency

.

Thereby

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, if they are encouraged enough in art, they will be volunteer

of

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creative

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the creative

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process.

Furthermore

, the creative process of humans

have

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many

advantages

to

solution

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the solution

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of problems.

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gift seems like a couple

hand

of God and

help

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us to explain our numerous

emotion

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emotions

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and

feeling

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feelings

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that can'

t

be explain

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in normal without art.

Secondly

; an additional important

advantages

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of

investment

of

public

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the public

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in

arts

is an advertisement of your country,

for

this

reason, a great number of

people

may want to see your country and they might visit there.

However

;

on the other

hand

,

investment

must be determined well. If

people

have

lack

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a lack

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of opportunity in the compulsory areas, necessary arrangements should be made.

For example

, if one person couldn'

t

go when need to hospital, creative progress wouldn'

t

matter for them. What's more; we can see it

on

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the

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Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. We have priority needs and our initial purpose provide them and

then

, we can go after our dream. Because of the fact that you shouldn'

t

say to any person ''If there is no bread, eat cake.'' like Marie Antoinette.

To sum up

, taking everything into account, the

investment

of

public

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the public

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in

arts

has various

advantages

but it seems to me,

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thing which

important

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is important

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is to do

this

in the smartest way and it is clear to me that

it's

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advantages

outweigh

it's

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disadvanteges

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disadvantages

.