Write about the following topic: A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write about the following topic: A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged
according to
social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, Linking Words
such
as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
It is true that nowadays, Linking Words
people
with expensive cars and branded clothing are being respected. A person with Use synonyms
high
level of integrity, respectfulness, kindness and Add an article
a high
the high
trustworthy
Replace the word
trustworthiness
are
not valued in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
todays
generation. So, we will discuss why Change to a genitive case
today's
people
with Use synonyms
money
and materialistic Use synonyms
things
are considered worthy.
Use synonyms
Advent
of technology and globalization Add an article
The advent
is
having Change the verb form
are
huge
impact on Add an article
a huge
people
. Use synonyms
Consequently
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
people
major focus nowadays is to earn more and more Change noun form
people's
money
and to show your worth. It is because they Use synonyms
also
know they will be respected based on Linking Words
amount
of Add an article
the amount
money
you Use synonyms
are having
. To illustrate, we can see there are so many big celebrities who earn crores and crores every year and they are capable of running Wrong verb form
have
NGO
or doing charity or good deeds but rather than doing some kind Correct article usage
an NGO
work
or charity, they spend their Change preposition
of work
money
buying luxury cars, expensive clothes, branded shoes etc. It is because they Use synonyms
also
know that Linking Words
people
now will know Use synonyms
you
worth by looking Correct pronoun usage
your
to
Change preposition
at
you
materialistic Correct pronoun usage
your
things
rather than Use synonyms
you
kindness and charity.
Correct pronoun usage
your
People
who Use synonyms
have
are rich Unnecessary verb
apply
they
spend huge Correct pronoun usage
apply
amount
of Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
money
on buying expensive Use synonyms
things
and setting up the bar Use synonyms
and
so, Correct word choice
apply
youth
of today Add an article
the youth
a youth
also
is more Linking Words
focusing
on earning Replace the word
focused
money
, but the issue is that they are focusing Use synonyms
whether
they are making Change preposition
on whether
money
through legal ways or illegal ways. They choose Use synonyms
wrong
ways to earn Correct article usage
the wrong
money
and break Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the laws
laws
. Fix the agreement mistake
law
For example
, In my neighbour a boy used to drive Linking Words
truck
and earn Correct article usage
a truck
money
but Use synonyms
then
Linking Words
this
friend bought a car worth Linking Words
of
7 lakhs. He Change preposition
apply
also
Linking Words
start
asking his parents to buy the same car for him, and when they refused, he tried to rob a house and was caught. So, Wrong verb form
started
this
curiosity of making your worth is destroying Linking Words
life
of many Add an article
the life
youth
.
Change to a plural noun
youths
Overall
, It is true that your respect is decided based on your Linking Words
money
and your materialistic Use synonyms
things
and Use synonyms
people
will only respect Use synonyms
if
Correct pronoun usage
you if
your
have Change the pronoun
you
money
.Use synonyms
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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