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In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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social
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Your essay needs a clearer structure. Consider separating your points into distinct paragraphs: introduction, body (with several paragraphs, each focusing on one main point), and conclusion.
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Make sure to provide specific examples to support each point you are making. For instance, you could give a detailed situation where social skills or qualifications were crucial in a job setting.
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Work on improving the clarity of your ideas. This can be achieved by better organization and using more precise language. Avoid repetitive statements and ensure that each sentence contributes to your overall argument.
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You have correctly identified the importance of possessing multiple skills in today's competitive world.
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Your attempt to define social skills and good qualifications shows that you understand these concepts.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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