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Band 4.5

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own

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There is no denying the fact that
climate
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 a phenomenon crucial to
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 and we should be Protect
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enivronment
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environment
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 it is a commonly held belief that the majority of
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,
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 think that
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 of Preventing
climate
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 we need to find a way to live with it, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I
consider
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that
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should
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tackle
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 issue to
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 our
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climate
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 has an immense Impact on the Earth.
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, the government has
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 plenty of resources
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, It has a lot of affected on
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, destroying forests
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 of
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reason
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, If we reduce the consumption of fuel or gases, We will have a suitable environment. Another Point to consider, human is quite responsible
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environment
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 cleanliness ,
at
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 the same time we must
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 aware of how
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 our
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. It is
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, the
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of
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 temperature has
an increases
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 for a longer period of time,
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 called
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global warming.
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,
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Canada
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 has pone to global warming and
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 of people’s decided
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 to
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, so that a Proof we can not
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live with it. In conclusion, despite people having different views , I believe that preventing
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significantly
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 crisis and we
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 ignore it.
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, I disagree with
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 say we find a way to live with it.

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task achievement
Your introduction presents a clear stance, but the phrasing could be clearer. Try to avoid small grammatical errors and rephrase the introduction for greater clarity.
task achievement
Ensure that your points are well-supported with specific, relevant examples. The essay could benefit from more detailed examples to back up the arguments. For instance, elaborating further on how deforestation impacts climate change or providing statistics on global warming would strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
Some of your ideas are slightly disjointed. Work on linking your ideas more effectively to improve the flow of your essay. Using more connectors or transitional phrases might help achieve this.
coherence cohesion
Revise your essay for grammatical accuracy and varied sentence structures. This will help in making your essay more readable and coherent.
task achievement
Your essay topic is timely and relevant, addressing crucial global issues regarding climate change.
coherence cohesion
You present a clear argument, advocating for the prevention of climate change rather than adapting to it. This stance is maintained throughout the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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