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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The figures
illustrates
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illustrate
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 numerous daylight activities done by jobless people in the UK in a year, separated by gender. The numbers are shown in percentage and the time is separated between morning and afternoon time.
In
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Overall
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overall
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,
main
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the main
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 interests that are popular
amongst
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among
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 them are chores, shopping, job hunting, and
lastly
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, catching up with friends or family. Between both
gender
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genders
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,
generally
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generally,
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 men are found to be more productive than women
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
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when they are out of work. In the case of females,
at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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, they would choose to do chores,
shopping
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shop
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, and
catching
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catch
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 up with their friends
then
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 continue with the search for a new job opportunity later
at
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in
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afternoon
Correct article usage
the afternoon
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.
However
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, males will be more active
for
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in
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 sending an application in the morning,
while
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 juggling with
houseworks
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housework
, shopping, or gardening. Based on the time, most people prefer to have a fruitful morning than in the afternoon. One example is when doing household activities, where there is more than
twofolds
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twofold
two folds
 difference in percentage in both
gender
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genders
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. In opposite, most people like to visit their relatives after midday.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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