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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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the chart
is demonstrating
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demonstrates
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 the
electricity
production
 and
consumption
 across 10 counties throughout
year
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the year
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 2014.
this
chrart
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chart
 has
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a ranking
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ranking
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ranked
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between
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of
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 10 counties comparing
production
 and
consumption
 in billion kWh
unit
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units
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 where
china
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China
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 is the
highiest
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highest
 producer of
electricity
 among the 10 counties
while
korea
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Korea
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 rep is the lowest. there is a dramatic
production
 and
consumption
on
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of
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electricity
 from
china
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China
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 and
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the unitied
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unitied
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united
 states
comparing
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compared
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 to the other listed
contries
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countries
. it is worth
to mention
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mentioning
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 that
germany
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Germany
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 is the only
contry
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country
 with a
consumption
 higher than
thier
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their
production
comparing
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compared
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 to all other
countiries
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countries
 where they produce
electricity
 more than they consume.
on the other hand
, the
highiest
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highest
 gap between
production
 and
consuption
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consumption
 is within
united
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the united
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 states with 4,099 billion kWh in
production
comparing
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compared
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 to 3,866
billon
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billion
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 kWh in
consuption
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consumption
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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