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The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.

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The chart below shows the average salary of the individual and population
that is
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 below the poverty line in three cities which are
California
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,
Utah
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 and
Florida
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.
Overall
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,
ages
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 under 18 are similar in number between
California
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 and
Florida
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, and
Utah
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 has a high
rate
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 of camper, too.
However
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, the
ages
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 over 60 in the three cities have different numbers each other; the average income in
California
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 and
Florida
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 is almost the same, but
Utah
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 is under them in
rate
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, shortly, the population of each city has different percentages.
To begin
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 with, for
ages
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 under 18,
Florida
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 has the lowest
rate
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, which is 16%, but it
also
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 has the highest number of
ages
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 over 60, which is 23%.
California
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 represents 17% of
ages
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 under 18 and 13% of
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 over 60, and that leads to
Utah
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, which has the highest
rate
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 of
ages
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 under 18 with 28% and,
ages
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 over 60 became the lowest with just 8%.
Finally
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, the average income per person in
California
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 is 23k, and the closest to the number is
Florida
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 with 22k, in
Utah
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, 17k per person, the population below, starting with
California
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 is 16%, and 9% for
Utah
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, eventually 12% to
Florida
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words california, utah, florida, ages, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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