The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The given graph shows information on the number of
participants
for various activities
at one social center
in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Change the spelling
centre
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that film club had became
the popular Change the verb form
become
activities
throughout the period. Meanwhile, the amateur dramatic class which looked promising in the initial was actually declined in
the end of the period.
In terms of film club and performance Change the preposition
at
activities
, the number of participants
contributing in
film club Change preposition
to
class
Fix the agreement mistake
classes
was
stood at around 65 Unnecessary verb
apply
people
in 2000, which it
saw Correct pronoun usage
apply
a stable contributors
for the next two decades. Correct the article-noun agreement
stable contributors
a stable contributor
In contrast
, amateur dramatics activity was engaged a
good start with Change preposition
at a
gathered
about 26 Wrong verb form
gathering
people
and it slightly rose to just below 30 people
in 2005. However
, it then
experienced a significant decrease to just around 5 people
at the end
of the period. On the other hand
, musical performance, starting the class later in 2005 with no participants
, had growth
moderately to Replace the word
grown
teached
at exactly 10 Correct your spelling
reach
people
in 2010 and it increased slightly to 15 contributors in 2020.
Regarding martial arts and table tennis, in 2000, both had around 36 and 15 participants
, respectively. While
martial arts were saw
Change the verb form
saw
a steady contributors
in two decades, table tennis slightly decreased in 2010 to precisely 20 Correct the article-noun agreement
steady contributors
a steady contributor
people
. It then
experienced a spike demand
in the Change preposition
in demand
last
decade, peaked at just above 50 people
, and made it as
the second-popular Change preposition
apply
activities
at Fix the agreement mistake
activity
Meulbourne
in 2020.Correct your spelling
Melbourne
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