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Last weekend, your cousin celebrated her 50th birthday, but you couldn't attend and you forgot to cancel. Write a letter to your cousin. In your letter: - Apologize for missing the birthday celebration - Explain why you missed it and why you hadn't let her know - Describe how you will make it up to her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,

#weekend #cousin #birthday #couldn #celebration #hadn #addresses #___
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Dear cousin, I trust
this
 email finds you in good health and spirits. I extend congratulations on reaching the milestone of your 50th birthday. It is my sincere hope that your
celerbration
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celebration
 was full of joy and memorable. Regrettably, my absence was a source of genuine
dissapointting
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disappointment
 for me. I failed to communicate with you and
this
 pains me. The conflicting commitment that prevented my attendance was my obligation to support my son at his soccer team competition. It was a challenging
weeked
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weekend
week
 as he fell ill prior to the match, and I made my efforts to ensuring his physically and mentally
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able to attend the competition. Fortunately, he
mad
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made
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 a full recovery and was able to participate fully, ultimately enjoying a rewarding time with his teammates. In an effort to show my apology, may I have the honour of treating you
dinner
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to dinner
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 at Dean and Dancy's, your favourite restaurant, at your convenience
this
 coming weekend? I eagerly
anticipate
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 your response. With warm regards, Norah
Submitted by norahc79 on

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grammatical accuracy
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, such as 'dissapointing' should be 'disappointing' and 'celerbration' should be 'celebration.'
paragraphing
Consider dividing the letter into more paragraphs to improve the readability and structure.
task response
You have addressed each bullet point of the task prompt thoroughly, showing a clear understanding of the task requirements.
tone
The tone of the letter is warm and suitable for addressing a family member, showing empathy and concern.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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