Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does the shortage of fresh water cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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of clean drinking
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supply in our current world now,
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issue is extremely important
due to
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the key part, that
the
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water
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in human health in general
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essay I am going to discuss the issues of lacking fresh
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and what can be done to solve
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this problems
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. Poor access to clean
water
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severe hug health
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to
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the human
body
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reach to good clean
water
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supply can have enormous
life threatening
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situation
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as, the total
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of minerals that can be found naturally in
water
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is very crucial to the
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function.
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, all
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organs need
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to work and do all the vital
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that the human
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needs to survive .
in addition
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, as a
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of desperate
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water
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some
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will consume any kind of
water
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even if it is undrinkable or unclean .
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, that will lead to the possibility of having germs and bacteria in the human
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example
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when the Sudan civil war started ,some
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destroyed and
people
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forced
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to drink from the dirty local river . And that leads to
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malaria . There are some steps that the government and
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in charge can take to reduce the effect of lacking clean fresh
water
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.
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, building dams to
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are located near
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big seas or rivers can
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the
water
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usable one .
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Saudi Arabia is an excellent example of building dams in the south of the country and turning the
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Sea
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to
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drinkable
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one . In conclusion , the clean
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supply
crises
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is essential
to
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any community to survive and
thrives
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. it is
very
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challenging issue but can be overcome when
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and
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work together to maintain and preserve
water
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your thoughts logically. The essay can benefit from a clearer structure and better paragraphing.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. You tend to speak in general terms, making your argument less convincing.
language use
Improve your sentence structure and grammar. Some sentences are unclear due to grammatical errors, affecting the readability of your essay.
task response
You have provided a relevant response to the task by addressing both problems caused by the lack of clean water and potential solutions.
coherence cohesion
You have a strong conclusion that summarizes the key points of your essay effectively.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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