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Many governments think that economics progress is there most important goal some people fieber think that other type of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion

#governments #economics #progress #people #fieber #type #country
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believes
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 that
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the
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economical
growth
 is the highest
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achievement
achivement
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achievement
 of a
country
,
while
 others still argue that,
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the
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development
 in other
aspects
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play
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 an
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equally
equaly
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equally
 vital role.
Economical
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development
 escalates the
overall
 living standards of a
country
.
However
,
similarly
, the
growth
 of other
aspects
such
 as cultural
development
 is
cruicial
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crucial
 for
long term
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 quality of life. In my opinion,
the
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economical
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economic
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 and non
economical
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economic
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growth
 are interconnected and both are important for a
country
. On one hand, a
country
, which has
a
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strong financial stability can provide a high quality
life
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of life
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 to its citizens. Economically stable governments can provide funds to improve the facilities,
such
 as comfortable, reliable public transport. For
an
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example, in first world countries like America and England, the public transport system is
relaiable
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reliable
, efficient and provides the necessary comfort to users
while
, in developing
countries
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countries,
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 people have to suffer
,
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 when they have to use common transport methods.
On the other hand
, as much as the
finantial
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financial
growth
, the
growth
 in other
aspects
 helps people to
maitain
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maintain
 their
overall
wellbeing
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well-being
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. Cultural
growth
 in a
country
 is a proper example
for
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this
. Without a highly developed cultural background, it is impossible for people to sustain for a long time,
eventhough
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even though
 the other facilities are good. For
an
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example, many migrants who move to Russia tend to leave the
country
 soon, as it is difficult for them to blend
in to
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inflexible
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 Russian culture. In conclusion,
eventhogh
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even though
 there is a split argument between the importance of
economical
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 and non-economical
development
 in countries, I believe that
the
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growth
 in all
aspects
are
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 equally necessary for
indivuduals
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individuals
 long lasting
well being
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well-being
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.
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking up longer sentences into shorter ones for clarity.
task achievement
Take care of minor grammatical errors such as 'the economical growth' (should be 'economic growth') and correct spelling mistakes like 'equaly'.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, adequately addressing the prompt.
relevant specific examples
The examples you employ, such as public transport in first-world countries, illustrate your points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic stability
  • GDP growth
  • Employment rates
  • Living standards
  • Public services
  • Infrastructure development
  • Social progress
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Equality
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Political stability
  • Cultural development
  • Long-term well-being
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive growth
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