The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The graph illustrates the average rise or fall in the price of copper, nickel and
zinc
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for each month threw 2014.
Overall
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, we can see that the nickel was by far the highest percentage change at the beginning but turned
to
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be the lowest
at the end
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.
While
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,
zinc
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started with the lowest percentage change,
although
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it ended at the highest point. Copper prices had a limited range of variation. In January the nickel was 6%, but by
coming
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of June it dramatically dropped to negative 3,
finally
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ending with a 1% rise in December. Copper started with a 2% increase
then
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started dropping for the next six months to reach slightly below negative one.
However
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, the price rose in the second half of the year ending at a little below two per cent.
Zinc
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started at 1% in January and rose a little to reach 2% in the next month
then
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it started to reduce slowly until June reached negative one and continued the next four months with limited movement,
Zinc
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ended the
last
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quarter of the year with a slight increase reached 2% as the highest one of the three.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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