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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both views anf give your opinion ?

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News media is the best option because it helps people to get updated news every minute. I personally believe that news media is a better option for people because they can access it when they are travelling, or doing something else.
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, people only get time to read newspapers in the morning. After that, they go out of home and do not get the chance to read
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untill
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until
 they reach home in the evening.
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task achievement
You should expand on your ideas. For example, you could discuss specific examples of how news media is more accessible during commutes or describe scenarios where digital media can offer advantages over newspapers.
coherence cohesion
Your essay needs a proper introduction and conclusion. Start by providing an overview of the debate about newspapers versus other media, and conclude by summarizing your points and reiterating your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Work on linking your ideas smoothly by using cohesive devices like 'however', 'in addition', and 'therefore'. This will help improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Your main points are clear, advocating for the advantages of digital news media in terms of accessibility and time convenience.
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You have relevant ideas that can be further developed for a stronger argument.

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