Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal questions such as their hobbies and interest, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Discuss both side and give your opinion.

I personally believe that reading
news
from electronic media or other sources is better than newspapers because
people
can easily access them when they doing something else.
People
can read
news
Add an article
the news
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while
commuting to their workplace or somewhere else.
News
media provides updated
news
every minute
therefore
,
people
can get the updated version of each
news
Correct quantifier usage
piece of news
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.
For example
,
people
in the USA prefer reading
news
from social media because they get the most updated version of
news
Add an article
the news
show examples
.
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coherence cohesion
Introduce your essay by stating the topic clearly and summarizing what you will be discussing. This helps set the stage for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring your essay into paragraphs with a clear focus. For instance, start with an introduction, followed by separate paragraphs that discuss the different points, and end with a conclusion.
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Ensure that each point you make supports your main argument. Provide evidence or examples to strengthen your argument.
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Expand on your examples. For instance, you mentioned people in the USA prefer reading news from social media. Explain why this preference exists and how it supports your main point.
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You have a clear stance on the topic, which is a good starting point.
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You made an effort to include examples to support your points, which is important in IELTS essays.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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