You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphic shows a breakdown of
crime
statistics in the UK for
last
year. The line graph shows the interrelation between criminal activity and
age
while
the pie chart illustrates the proportion of four different
crime
types. When looking at the line graph it is immediately clear that young
people
accounted for a disproportionately high level of
crime
last
year and that the
age
at which
people
are involved in criminal activity peaks at twenty with nearly a million
crimes
being committed by
people
of
this
age
. The number of
crimes
then
plummeted before levelling off at 28. the likelihood of being involved in criminal activity continued to decline with
age
. Of the
crimes
identified in the bar chart, violent
crime
was the most common at nearly half of the total, and there were twice as many
crimes
involving violence as there were property or drug
crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
show examples
. Less serious
anti social
Add a hyphen
anti-social
show examples
behaviour related
crime
was relatively low.
Overall
,
it is clear that
young
people
were much more likely to be the perpetrators of
crime
and that the majority of
this
crime
was
violence related
Add a hyphen
violence-related
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, people, crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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