In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on sustainable living and reducing enviromental impact.

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their lifestyles and trying to decrease the environmental impact. Throw
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a lot of challenges that may affect their goals and
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emphasis on sustainable living. In my opinion when you realize the
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sustainable living and how
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environmental changes can affect your
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healthy mentality. The awareness of the societies to improve their quality of
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day by day because they
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a miserable
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with a lot of bad habits that affect their mental, physical emotional health. Unfortunately,
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there is a lot of
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that
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of
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adopting a sustainable lifestyle. First the addiction
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social media and
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especially with the new generations.
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significant
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conversation and that
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communication and gathering .
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there are living a sedentary
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life styles
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because of all these
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of
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the number of healthy
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variety of unhealthy options . To reduce
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bad habits and gain
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sustainability we have to encourage
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and
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around us
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a multiple practical actions
people
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can do to contribute to sustainability.
Healthy
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diet and
exercising
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have a good impact on our
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life
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meditation and therapy classes can help you to keep focusing
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your healthy
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lifestyle
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life styles
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, In conclusion,
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are aware
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the
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but they have to do
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best and good effort to keep up
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mentality .
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure ideas are organised logically. Each paragraph should flow smoothly and connect with the previous one.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce informal language use.
Task Achievement
Elaborate on points with relevant examples to reinforce arguments.
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Expand on ideas to make them clearer and more comprehensive.
Grammatical Accuracy
Proofread for typos and small grammatical errors.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides a personal opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a clear attempt to structure the essay with an introduction and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Attempts to identify and discuss challenges to sustainable living, which is relevant to the topic.

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