the charts below show what UK garduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018

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the graduate and postgraduate

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tendency distribution between the UK graduate and postgraduate

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continued

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education and the smallest

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number of graduates prefer to

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who want to do

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job with differences of about 1500 graduates, 29665 and 17735 respectively.

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any voluntary work with 16235 and 3500 respectively.

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are almost equal with 2725 and 2535 respectively. Of these, only 345 postgraduates participated in voluntary work and 1625

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to stay unemployed

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the charts below show what UK garduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018

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