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the charts below show what UK garduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018

the charts below show what UK garduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2018
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The bar graph
illustrate
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 the graduate and postgraduate
students
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 employment in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, the charts
shows
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same
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the same
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 tendency distribution between the UK graduate and postgraduate
students
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: the most
part
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 of
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students
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the students
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 continued
further
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 education and the smallest
part
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 was engaged volunteer work. Over the whole time period,
highest
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 number of graduates prefer to
further
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 studies compared to
hose
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those
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 who want to do
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part time
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 job with differences of about 1500 graduates, 29665 and 17735 respectively.
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,
5
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a 5
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times
biggest
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 number of
students
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prefers
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 to be unemployed than
doing
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do
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 any voluntary work with 16235 and 3500 respectively.
Loking
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Looking
speciafically
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specifically
, postgraduates who
wants
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 to
further
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 study and
working
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work
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part time
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part-time
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 are almost equal with 2725 and 2535 respectively. Of these, only 345 postgraduates participated in voluntary work and 1625
students
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prefers
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 to stay unemployed

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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