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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.

#students #internet #effects #purposes
The
internet
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it can
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 a significant role in their education.
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 the negative side of using the
internet
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 learning. The advantages of using a different source to get knowledge are various which help
students
 to increase their experience by research on many websites.
For instance
, in Covid-19 ,situations many universities and schools seek to present a variety of specialized courses on management, design and languages. Another advantage that can
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an effective tool
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 share documents between
students
 and their teachers and practice interactive activities by making a group in Google Drive to discuss homework and play on KAHOOT.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of using the
internet
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students
 are that they cannot think
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 side because they are stealing the ideas and stop
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Furthermore
, it is not good for their health because most
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young people prefer to spend free time playing with friends online rather than outdoor
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In addition
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 United States research study
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 that 75% of
students
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don't understand
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it by themself. In conclusion, I do not support the suggestion that
internet
 use has to be restricted in education. As The student can use the
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 a good way more than the other ways
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 their information and knowledge.
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coherence cohesion
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There are relevant specific examples, such as the use of Google Drive and KAHOOT, to support your points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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