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Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of foods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 globalized era, the
usage
 of
plastic
 is booming day by day which caused numerous
effect
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to
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 the environment. It is argued by some folks that industries should control the
usage
 of
plastic
whereas
, some individuals contend that it should
stopped
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 by consumers. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss
the
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both opinions
along with
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To begin
 with,
the
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production companies play a vital role
for
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in
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 the
usage
 of
plastic
. Most of the
manufactueres
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manufacturers
manufactures
 use
plastic
 for the packaging because it is
cheap
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 source which
give
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 the benefit to businessmen.
Nevertheless
, in many regions government banned the
usage
 of
plastic
 in factories which automatically decreased the production of
plastic
 packaging.
For example
, A survey conducted by Time
New
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 of India
in
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which they
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indicated in India legal bodies banned the
usage
 of
plastic
 in some main cities like Mumbai and Delhi which dropped 50% of
plastic
usage
. On the
controry
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contrary
, It is
also
 crucial that local citizen should reduce the
usage
 of
plastic
 in their daily routine. It is
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a clearly
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clearly
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 indication if people
banned
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ban
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 the
usage
 of
plastic
 and
don't
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didn't
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 buy
the
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plastic
 packing products,
then
the
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production
will
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 drop significantly. In
recent
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 article
wrote
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 by
University
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the University
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 of Toronto in which they described in Italy one rural area local people banned
the
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plastic
 packaging
then
 in one year the
usage
 of
plastic
is
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decreased by 70%. In
a
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conclusion, there is no doubt
plastic
 plays
a
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 important role to
distrub
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disturb
 the
eco system
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ecosystem
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 of the
enviroment
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environment
.
Therefore
, it
the
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 duty of every citizen, government and
manufactures
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manufacturing
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comapnies
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companies
 should stop the
usage
 of
plastic
 packaging to protect the beautiful environment for upcoming generations.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all paragraphs flow smoothly from one to the next. Enhance the use of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar accuracy to ensure clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.
task achievement
Expand on the points made in each paragraph with more in-depth analysis and supporting details to strengthen arguments.
task achievement
Polish the introduction and conclusion so that they clearly outline and summarize the main points of the essay. Avoid redundancy and ensure a clear, concise message.
task achievement
Provided relevant and specific examples to support the arguments, which adds credibility to the essay.
task achievement
Addressed both sides of the argument clearly, ensuring a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay structure is clear with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • supply chain
  • sustainable packaging alternatives
  • industry standards
  • consumer behavior
  • informed purchasing decisions
  • market pressure
  • environmental impact
  • conscientious shopping habits
  • financial resources
  • research and development
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