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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table shows the amount of fresh
fish
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 in
tons
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, caught or imported into Perth, Australia from 2004 to 2014.
Overall
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, the trend for catching and importing fresh
fish
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 was increasing.
Regarding the
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The
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tons
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 of fresh
fish
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 locally fished, was around 2500
tons
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 in 2004, which rose to its maximum
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of
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just above 8000 in 2008, and through the following years till 2014, decreased.
Finally
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. it stood at approximately 5000
tons
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 in 2014. As for the
tons
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 of
fish
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 imported to Perth, Australia, it started at around 450 in 2004, which experienced a rising fluctuation until 2012, which was its maximum, and decreased through the rest of the report and stood at just under 6000 in 2014.
On the other hand
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 the total amount of fresh
fish
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 consumption in Perth, Australia experienced an upward trend during
this
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 study. To be precise, the total amount of
fish
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 consumed in 2004, was marginally above 3000,
while
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 sored to 8000 in 2010, which was its high and declined to under 6000 in 2014,
while
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 was still over that of 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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