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In many parts of world there is continuos coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

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Max
's Decision Day. From his savings,
Max
 was to buy a new
skateboard
 worth a hundred
dollars
. He had a balance of sixty
dollars
 and
this
 meant that he had to look for the remaining forty
dollars
. His dad gave him 20
dollars
 to clean the attic and though
Max
 hated doing it, he had no choice. (People Choose) At the same time, he
also
 wondered whether he wanted to spend the
cash free
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 Saturday just hanging out with friends or working for free cash. In the end, he figured that using his Saturday to earn the money was more worth it than having fun all day. (All Choices Involve Costs.) When
Max
 did finish the work in the attic, he was quite happy for he had raised the sum of eighty
dollars
. He was heading to the store
,
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 when on his way a new video game was going for twenty
dollars
. Of course, he wanted one but no, it was postponing the plans for the
skateboard
. It was a dilemma where he weighed the marginal benefit. of enjoying himself now against the marginal cost. of the
further
 delay in getting the
skateboard
.
Max
 predicted himself
much
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 more agreeable-(People Make Decisions at the Margin).
Some time
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 after,
Max
’s
neighbor
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 gave him 20
dollars
 extra for mowing their lawn.
Max
 took up the offer knowing that he had a target to reach. (People Respond to Incentives) Having a purse of $100,
Max
 chose to make purchases of the
skateboard
, realizing that his wise decisions did bear fruit.
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