Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loos of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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problems like pollution and

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Using specific examples to support your points will strengthen the essay and make your argument more convincing.

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Elaborate more on both sides of the argument. Providing evidence or more detailed explanations will help in achieving a balanced and thorough discussion.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a central idea and that your points are clearly linked to it, enhancing overall cohesion.

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Avoid redundancy and make sure every sentence contributes to advancing your argument.

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The introduction directly addresses the prompt and clearly states your position, which is a strong start for the essay.

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There is a logical structure in place, which makes your essay easy to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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