The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart above depicts information about the percentage of
children
who learn and play various
type
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types
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of musical
instuments
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instruments
from 2005 to 2015 at one particular school.
Overall
it can be seen that piano and guitar show a
constantly
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increase.
Otherwise
,
violin
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the violin
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was different and
same
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the same
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goes
to
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drums.
Initially
, in 2005,
children
who played piano were as much as 11 per
cent
.
Then
, significantly upward to 20 per
cent
. In 2015, the number was sharply up to 38 per
cent
.
Besides
, in 2005,
children
who engaged to learn guitar were approximately 9 per
cent
.
Subsequently
,
smoothly
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it smoothly
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higher to 19 per
cent
, in 2010. After that, continuously rose
until
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to
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40 per
cent
. On the other sides,
children
who used drums were very little, only around 5 per
cent
. In
five
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the five
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next
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apply
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years ahead, the percentage
was
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stagnanted
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stagnant
stagnated
. In 2015, the number slightly climbed to 8 per
cent
.
Last
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instrument,
children
who liked to play
violin
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the violin
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were about 8 per
cent
. Afterwards, the percentage
was consistently downgrade
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was consistently downgraded
was consistently downgrading
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from time to time. Respectively, 7 per
cent
in 2010 and 5 per
cent
in 2015.
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