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The graph below shows in formation about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows in formation about the languages that 13-year-old students in one school chose to study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 graph provides key information about how many learners want to learn French or Mandarin in the United Kingdom between the
years
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 2000 and the present.
Overall
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, it is obvious that French is much
popular
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more popular
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 than Chinese, especially when we spoke about the
years
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 2000-2003 with more than 140 students
in
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at
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 the beginning of the 21st century .
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, after those
years
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, the French began decreasing year after.
On the other hand
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, Mandarin starts with humble beginnings, with less than 20 students deciding to learn the Chinese language,
nevertheless
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,the
learners
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number of learners
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 who choose to learn Chinese decreases from below 20 to above 70 in just 5
years
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.
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Although
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However
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, the number of students did not change significantly after 2005, making the French language the dominant language in all
years
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 even if the latest
years
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 were not the best
years
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 for French. But, when it comes to Mandarin, it is more likely to defeat
French
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the French
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 after a couple of
years
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, the graph tells us that beating
French
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the French
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 is just a matter of time.
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