The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and mount of thime spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the informationn by selecting and reporting the ain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and mount of thime spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the informationn by selecting and reporting the ain features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the proportion of households using three different types of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing choir from 1920 to 2019 with a twenty-year interval.
Overall
, it is evident that refrigerators had the greatest incline in the percentages of use by households
while
washing
machines
showed a minimal increase over forty years. Meanwhile, people decreased their time on housework over the year. In 1920, nobody used refrigerators, but they gained popularity and increased substantially in their percentages to 90% in 1980, surpassing other electrical appliances, reaching a peak of 100% by 1980 and remaining steady till the end. Followed by vacuums, which began at 30 % in1920, rising to 100% in 2000.
In contrast
, washing
machines
were relatively high from the start at 40%, but they had minimal positive change in percentage, accounting for approximately 30%.
Consequently
, with the increase in electric appliance use, the number of hours spent on housework decreased gradually from 50% in 1920 to 10% by 2019. In conclusion, washing
machines
and refrigerators gained great popularity,
while
washing
machines
saw a minimal increase in percentage, causing people to do fewer chores over the
year
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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