There are more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?
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with younger Use synonyms
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and they have to compete with them despite their future health issues.
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is the lack of jobs and opportunities to get money for their next lifetime. Because of Correct pronoun usage
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some juniors think that they have more possibilities to get their future professions. But, Add a comma
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of old age try to get their own way of competing with others. Use synonyms
For example
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to create new jobs and more productive life experiences in their elder years. Use synonyms
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to make them feel more secure and Use synonyms
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of individuals were employed.
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task response
To improve task response, try to provide a more comprehensive analysis of the problem by discussing multiple issues that may arise from older individuals competing with younger people for the same jobs. Expand on potential problems and add more perspectives.
coherence cohesion
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task response
The essay includes relevant examples, such as the statistics from South Korea and the governmental agency in the author's country. These add depth to the points being made.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion and summarize the main points.
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