The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
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The line graph demonstrates how much Australia exported in percentage to Japan,
US
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the US
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, China and India from 1990 to 2012.
While
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exports
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to some countries had a tendency to increase, the others had the opposite pattern. Noticeably,
although
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the percentage of
exports
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to China and India composed 3% each in 1990, their figures increased by 25 and 2
percent
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per cent
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respectively for the whole period. From 1990 to 2005, after the
exports
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to China tripled to 10%, they jumped to a quarter of the Australian
exports
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. For the
last
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two years, there was a growth of 3%,
while
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India’s
import
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imports
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dropped from
its
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their
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peak of 7% to 5% in
this
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period.
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, the latter one experienced no fluctuation in the imports from 1990 to 2000.
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, though Japan was the biggest importer of Australian goods at the beginning of the period, constituting a massive 26%, its
exports
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were declining smoothly throughout to become the second most popular importer with 16%. Meanwhile,the percentage of
exports
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to the US was fluctuating, decreasing from 11% to 6%.
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there was a drop to 8
percent
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per cent
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in 1995, the figures went back to the previous values in 2000. From 2000 to 2010, there was a fall again to 5% before a little growth
by
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of
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1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
  • analyze
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
  • political events
  • Country A/B/C/D
  • trends
  • insights
  • compare/comparison
  • examine
  • reveal
  • indicate
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