The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
The line graph demonstrates how much Australia exported in percentage to Japan,
US
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the US
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, China and India from 1990 to 2012.
While
exports
to some countries had a tendency to increase, the others had the opposite pattern. Noticeably,
although
the percentage of
exports
to China and India composed 3% each in 1990, their figures increased by 25 and 2
percent
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per cent
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respectively for the whole period. From 1990 to 2005, after the
exports
to China tripled to 10%, they jumped to a quarter of the Australian
exports
. For the
last
two years, there was a growth of 3%,
while
India’s
import
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imports
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dropped from
its
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their
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peak of 7% to 5% in
this
period.
However
, the latter one experienced no fluctuation in the imports from 1990 to 2000.
By contrast
, though Japan was the biggest importer of Australian goods at the beginning of the period, constituting a massive 26%, its
exports
were declining smoothly throughout to become the second most popular importer with 16%. Meanwhile,the percentage of
exports
to the US was fluctuating, decreasing from 11% to 6%.
While
there was a drop to 8
percent
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in 1995, the figures went back to the previous values in 2000. From 2000 to 2010, there was a fall again to 5% before a little growth
by
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of
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1%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
  • analyze
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
  • political events
  • Country A/B/C/D
  • trends
  • insights
  • compare/comparison
  • examine
  • reveal
  • indicate
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