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The map below is of the the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned of the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and maek comparison where relevant.

The map below is of the the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned of the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and maek comparison where relevant.
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This
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 figure shows the
town
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 of GARLSDON. A new supermarket with the sign ‘’S’’ is planned for
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town
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. They considered two possible areas for
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place
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.
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, in
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 map, GARLSDON with a 65000
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 has four different regions countryside,
town
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centre
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, housing, and industry. The first possible
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 is considered in the countryside with S1 and the other
place
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 may be constructed in the
Town
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Centre
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 with S2. The S1 area is placed between the railway and main roads on the northwest of GARLSDON.
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place
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 is a 12km distance to Hindon with a 10000
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. The S2 site is almost on the southern of the map in the
town
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centre
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 with no traffic zone.
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place
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 is near the railway and two main roads pass from the eastern and western of the
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centre
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. One of them is Brandon with 16km and 15000
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 is on the west and the other one is Cransdon with 25km and 29000
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 is on the east.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, place, population, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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