In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?n?

The world
nowdays
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conduct
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a huge
inovation
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innovation
renovation
and
devolpmental
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developmental
changes. There is a suggestion in the future that all
vehicles
considerable to be
driverless
.
This
essay will encourage the idea and highlight the advantages of
driverless
.
Overveiw
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Overview
, The cities are fully crowded with
car
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cars
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,buses and trucks
as a result
of the number of population. To
tackels
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tackle
tackles
this
issue, try to reduce the number of
driver
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by
the
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driverless
vehicles
.
Moreover
, The
roud
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road
congestion
keep
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people
fully stressed and tired
additionally
the
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driverless
cars will be more convenient.
Furthermore
, it
is
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will help to
decline
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reduce
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the
numbers
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number
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of
employers
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employees
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drive
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driving
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the buses and
taxies
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taxis
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. The idea of
driverless
vehicles
will be more
orginizated
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organised
and
fluless
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flueless
flawless
.
Due to
the emotional stress
people
face it
that
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can keep them unable to drive well.
Nevertheless
, to
emphasis
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of the driving quality
i
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thinks
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that
driverless
vehicles
will solve the issue. In
additinally
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addition
, it
is play
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a
significants
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significant
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different in time saving
while
people
can use
there
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their
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free time
on
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in
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the cars doing
there
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their
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task
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tasks
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instead
of driving.
At
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the end, as any new project will be
their
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there
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some drawbacks.
Its
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an
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machine
to
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it is exposed to some technical issues and
maintanace
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maintenance
in order it can keep
humuns savety
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humans safe
in
dangours
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dangerous
. But related to my point of view the
develpment
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development
in
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of
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vehicles
will make a huge
different
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difference
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in
people
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people's
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life and keep it more
time saving
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time-saving
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and simple.
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