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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?n?

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possibilities
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of
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vehicles
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 will be
driverless
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mean
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 all people transported with
will
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them will
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 be passengers. In my perspective, the benefits of
driverless
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vehicles
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 outweigh
its
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their
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 drawbacks in both
time
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 and cost
saving
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. Undoubtably, one of the most concerning
problem
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problems
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 in
driverless
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vehicles
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 is relying all of your safety
to
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A.I.
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AI
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 (Artificial
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instead
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 of your driving skill or skilled
driver
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.
However
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,
driverless
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 cars' A.I.
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decised
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decided
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programing
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programming
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model
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,
simulation
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, and
calculation
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calculations
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, which
much
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are much
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 higher in accuracy than human
decision
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. To illustrate, nowadays, less than 1
percent
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 of
man-kind
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 can compete with
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computer vision technology just to identify the picture between dogs and cats.
For the
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 benefits of
driverless
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vehicles
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on
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maximise
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time
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 and cost efficiency, the
driverless
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 cars mean former
driver
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do
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 not have to waste their
time
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to drive
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driving
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 their car to any destination.
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, if the officer, who
need
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needs
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 2 hours of driving to go to work
everyday
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buy
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new
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a new
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driverless
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 car, he will save more than 300 hours per year of focusing on driving. The financial benefits of
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 trucks and buses are happening with
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company
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companies
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 that need
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driver
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drivers
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 to transport their goods or people because they don't need to hire more
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driver
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drivers
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 anytime
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company
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companies
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 scale up anymore. They can just only buy new
driverless
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 trucks. To elaborate, Many logistic
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company
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companies
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 employ more than three
shift
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shifts
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 of
driver
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 to handle just one car for 24-7 which can
be easily replace
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be easily replaced
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 by
driverless
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. In conclusion, the advantages of
driverless
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vehicles
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 outweigh
its
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their
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 disadvantages in both
time
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 saving for passenger and
also
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financial
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finances
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 for
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company
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companies
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 which use
the
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apply
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driverless
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vehicles
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 to
leaverage
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leverage
 their
time
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 and cost efficiency.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. The second paragraph covers multiple aspects which makes it less clear.
task achievement
Work on sentence structure and grammar to avoid awkward phrasing.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents an introduction and a conclusion.
task achievement
Relevant examples, such as the time saved by a driverless car, effectively support the arguments.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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